Ueda_Angel Posted May 12, 2011 Share Posted May 12, 2011 The colors dance around the waves Reflecting off my skin. The water washes over me Cleansing me of my sin. The sun’s began is journey Beneath the crashing waves But the feel of that light upon my face It’s what I mostly crave. The sight that sits before my eyes Will keep me in a daze If you could see that shimmering light Even you would be amazed. The sun it heats the icy waves Enough for me so see Although the sun is setting now, It sets the night sky free. 10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
brohne Posted May 13, 2011 Share Posted May 13, 2011 That last stanza is amazing. I want to do a photoshop to go with this, would you mind? 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JenovaVII Posted May 13, 2011 Share Posted May 13, 2011 Man, you are really incredibly good. This left me with such a relaxed feeling, like it has a purifying effect of sorts (: It's so damn satisfying to read such amazing literature. And brohne, yes please, do it NOW! It's gonna be a f*cking masterpiece *.* :Red_fox: 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
K Posted May 13, 2011 Share Posted May 13, 2011 . .sooooooooooooooooooo REFRESHING onion2 . and i really agree with one-san (jenova), it's so relaxing :cuteonion7: . .it delivers me to this scene: i was sitting on the sea-side (or any bodies of water), fully stretched legs, while my both hands supporting my half body, and looking at the sky, then my eyes closed, and starts to feel the cold breeze that this poem made . .so COOL! onion2 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Belita Posted May 13, 2011 Share Posted May 13, 2011 My fav. so far... I love the twilight(not the film/books)but the twilight itself... Brings me peace, and you're writing about it makes me rmember why i love it so much... Thank you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goki Posted May 14, 2011 Share Posted May 14, 2011 are u tryin to break free, or u wish to ? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ChibiCiciChan Posted May 16, 2011 Share Posted May 16, 2011 It's so beautiful....Tat-chan, you are amazing Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hinata--chan Posted May 29, 2011 Share Posted May 29, 2011 So beautiful I can the scene in my head when I read it ^^ . Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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