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Let me know what you think and which one your favorite is :D

 

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"Patience"

 

You made me think last night

About everything you've said

And then I started wondering

If I may have been misled

 

I thought about it long

And maybe it is true

Everything I read last night

A note to me from you

 

At this moment in my life

I'm not sure where I wanna be

I need some time to sit and think

Can you wait so patiently?

 

I feel a little scared

And it's something I'll admit

Even though the feeling is there

I'm still afraid to commit

 

Not matter what I say to you

I want things to stay the same

Because I can't help but to smile

Whenever I hear your name

 

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"Desolation"

 

Desolate dreams of a faraway place

pierce the depths of my weary spirit.

Below the ominous and moonless night

I sulk in the dark shadows of yesterday.

On this shrouded road worth traveling

a heavy heart can get you nowhere.

But still I walk on through this bone-chilling mist

in hopes of finding that fabled land.

Longing for the warmth of my dreams

these aching feet press on…

 

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"Ruptured Heart"

 

Blurry vision settled in

And my hands began to shake

A heavy chest and shallow breath

With my heart about to ache

 

I could not comprehend your words

Or know what I should say

They numbed my body and my mind

Those words of metal decay

 

Frantically I waited

For you to claim a joke

But you just stood there in silence

And I began to choke

 

Smothered by those heavy words

And in desperate need of air

I slowly began to suffocate

For it was far too much to bare

 

My face started to pale

And my heart began to slow

Never looking back at me

Was your last and final blow

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Very beautiful poems! You are really talented!

 

My favorite was "Patience", but I also really really liked the last strophe of the poem "Ruptured Heart"

"My face started to pale

And my heart began to slow

Never looking back at me

Was your last and final blow"

 

Very very cute! :)

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Awww thank you everyone!!! They most recent one was "Ruptured Heart" which was written a few weeks ago. And "Patience" was written about 5 years ago lol. I'm glad you enjoy them though! I've never really shared my work before so I'm glad that I'm getting positive feedback :D

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Chacha, thank you! I actually have a notebook full of poems. Some are not as good as others and some are a little more light-hearted than "Ruptured Heart" :)

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Thank you Miro! :D Maybe I should post more of my darker poems up. Everyone seems to like those most:msn_red_fox 3

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Your very good :)

 

My favorite is "Patience", but I really like "Ruptured Heart" too.

 

I would love to read more poems from you indeed :)

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Amazing!!...Very awesome.

You're poems are like an expert's..XD

Your poems reminds me of how our club president writes poems.

Its simply Awesome!!!..Too Cool!!..Well, I guess its just natural for you since you're british.

Shakespeare is british and is good with these kinds of stuff also!!.>XD>..Are You a Shakespeare fan also?

Wow!..I admire You!..XD

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@yojichan, Thank you :D Yeah "Ruptured Heart" is one of my favorites for that reason

 

@EmiZea, Thanks very much! I will definitely post some more up when I get a chance. All my poems are all scattered around random notebooks here and there lol.

 

@Kasuku, Thank you for all the compliments!! Though I'm not sure I'd go as far as expert lol. But actually I'm not british XD I'm actually American lol :p But I am definitely a Shakespeare fan!!!

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YLove thank you for your kind words and compliments :) I will definitely try to find time today to post some more!

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PATIENCE

 

. .what a heart-touching poem you made, i really really like this :)

 

. .the emotions you want to express that binds behind those poems, reached and touched my heart :cuteonion57:

 

(we have a few things in common)

 

. .unluckily, i can't post mine cause it's written in "tagalog" (my language)

 

. .hope i could read much from you, :hamtaro-005 (19):

 

. you have my full support on your up-coming creations, whether it is a poem or sketches :leaf12:

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Awww thank you so much cloudy-chan! :D I'm so glad that they have touched your heart and that you enjoy them! I will definitely be posting a few more up in a couple days :)

 

Do you think that you could translate your poems into English? I would love to read them :D I know it probably won't be the same in English but I wouldn't mind still reading them :)

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Awww thank you so much cloudy-chan! :D I'm so glad that they have touched your heart and that you enjoy them! I will definitely be posting a few more up in a couple days :)

 

Do you think that you could translate your poems into English? I would love to read them :D I know it probably won't be the same in English but I wouldn't mind still reading them :)

 

..okay, i'll try, but once i get it back (i was not able to bring it when we transferred here in our new house) :)

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Thank you :D I am going to put a couple more up this weekend as well so maybe you can find a favorite in those lol :p

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