Rescue :D

[TricksXia]

My very first poem.leaf3

I'm still a newbie at making them but oh well here it goes.

 

 

 

 

 

I've always been like this,

Waiting at ease,

But the truth is

I've been falling into the deepest abyss.

I couldn't even imagine

That you would come,

And rescue me from this hatred that I'm feeling.

For you, it's just a fling,

But I will hold onto this precious sensation, darling.

For it is the only thing I have to continue on living.

 

I hope you'll point my mistakes. Hope you enjoyed reading it.:leaf3:

[K]

. .simple but meaningful,

 

. there's a sense at every word, and you were able to give emphasis to important words that carries the feeling

[Aoi]

Very beautiful and romantic! I like it a lot! :msn_red_fox 15

 

PS: I wouldn't say that this is your first poem! Very very well done!

[TricksXia]

O.O Wow! Thanks!

[Miro]

I also like it a lot!

 

Very good job TricksXia! :5yoyo34:

[Amander123]

Aww its beautiful I think you did great for your first poem! In fact, I would never have guessed that it was only you first

[TricksXia]

O.O Oh my...thank you for these wonderful comments!

[현애]

it so sweet.:cuteonion41::cuteonion41:

[TricksXia]

Sankyuu :leaf3: