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My second BL poem 18+


Amander123
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Warning: this poem is for 18+

I hope you enjoy :)

 

 

"Lust"

 

His heavy breathing

Was turning me on

I wanted him to fuck me

Until the break of dawn

 

My body was sweaty

I was fully erect

I needed him to mount me

If he did not object

 

One finger went in

And then two fingers next

He streched me out good

Before anal-sex

 

My body was aching

For him to go in

I wanted the pleasure

And heat of his skin

 

He entered at last

And I let out a groan

He then grabbed my penis

As I started to moan

 

With a nibble on my ear

His hips began to thrust

This was not true love

It was only pure lust

 

Faster he went

As he pulled on my hair

This pleasure was mutual

An ecstacy we shared

 

He continued to fuck me

Until I came on the sheet

And he erupted inside me

A feeling so sweet

 

He put on his clothes

And walked out the door

He left me alone

As I cried on the floor

 

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. .amander-sama, your poem was just right to be rated 18+, hahaha, lol :D

 

. .it's so revealing, i guess there's nothing much to say, it already expresses the feelings from the formation of words, itself :)

 

. .you did another great work, amander-sama :leaf12:

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I enjoyed it very much. Explicit and straight forward, nothing left to hide. It was fast paced but it felt right.

It was thoroughly well and clearly written, and you were perfectly able to expose the passionate scene, that was really good. Crude and shameless without nastiness or kinkiness. Just honest want and craving.

Also loved the ending, I prefer angst to happy ever after :msn_red_fox 9

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Thanks everyone!! :)

 

It's not as good as what I can normally write but I wrote late at night and I was tired so that's probably why lol

I'm glad you still liked it anyways :D

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Amander your poem is so hot! :D

 

I like it a lot!

 

hahaha it was so hot that you needed spoilers :leaf5:

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Amander your poem is so hot! :D

 

I like it a lot!

 

hahaha it was so hot that you needed spoilers :leaf5:

 

 

Hahahahahaha you're right lol. I didn't think of it that way :p

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Well I just got a girl erection :7yoyo10::2yoyo6:

That was awesome writing! Very descriptive! rabbit14

 

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Well I just got a girl erection :7yoyo10::2yoyo6:

That was awesome writing! Very descriptive! rabbit14

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