Amander123 Posted April 29, 2011 Posted April 29, 2011 Warning: this poem is for 18+ I hope you enjoy "Lust" His heavy breathing Was turning me on I wanted him to fuck me Until the break of dawn My body was sweaty I was fully erect I needed him to mount me If he did not object One finger went in And then two fingers next He streched me out good Before anal-sex My body was aching For him to go in I wanted the pleasure And heat of his skin He entered at last And I let out a groan He then grabbed my penis As I started to moan With a nibble on my ear His hips began to thrust This was not true love It was only pure lust Faster he went As he pulled on my hair This pleasure was mutual An ecstacy we shared He continued to fuck me Until I came on the sheet And he erupted inside me A feeling so sweet He put on his clothes And walked out the door He left me alone As I cried on the floor 21
K Posted April 29, 2011 Posted April 29, 2011 . .amander-sama, your poem was just right to be rated 18+, hahaha, lol . .it's so revealing, i guess there's nothing much to say, it already expresses the feelings from the formation of words, itself . .you did another great work, amander-sama :leaf12: 1
JenovaVII Posted April 29, 2011 Posted April 29, 2011 I enjoyed it very much. Explicit and straight forward, nothing left to hide. It was fast paced but it felt right. It was thoroughly well and clearly written, and you were perfectly able to expose the passionate scene, that was really good. Crude and shameless without nastiness or kinkiness. Just honest want and craving. Also loved the ending, I prefer angst to happy ever after :msn_red_fox 9 1
misakixusagi Posted April 29, 2011 Posted April 29, 2011 o_o wow that is a awsome poem!! felt like i was reading a manga, you used descript words lol luv it 1
Amander123 Posted April 29, 2011 Author Posted April 29, 2011 Thanks everyone!! It's not as good as what I can normally write but I wrote late at night and I was tired so that's probably why lol I'm glad you still liked it anyways
Amander123 Posted May 5, 2011 Author Posted May 5, 2011 Thank you so much YAO(H)I_lover!! I'm glad everyone likes it
Aki Posted May 6, 2011 Posted May 6, 2011 Amander your poem is so hot! I like it a lot! hahaha it was so hot that you needed spoilers :leaf5: 1
Amander123 Posted May 11, 2011 Author Posted May 11, 2011 Amander your poem is so hot! I like it a lot! hahaha it was so hot that you needed spoilers :leaf5: Hahahahahaha you're right lol. I didn't think of it that way
Ueda_Angel Posted May 16, 2011 Posted May 16, 2011 Lemon in Poetry form not common but not rare found it rather interesting. 1
Harukei Posted May 18, 2011 Posted May 18, 2011 *nosebleeds* Really, I loved it so much~ I have to share this >// 1
YaoiPikachu Posted October 18, 2013 Posted October 18, 2013 Well I just got a girl erection :7yoyo10::2yoyo6: That was awesome writing! Very descriptive! rabbit14 - - - Updated - - - Well I just got a girl erection :7yoyo10::2yoyo6: That was awesome writing! Very descriptive! rabbit14
ukemextreme Posted December 30, 2013 Posted December 30, 2013 woah. like seriously, woah. great job for a very steamy poem.:leaf12: i still feel bad for the speaker though ;n;
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