Cloudy's first attempt of bl poem and another ordinary one

[K]

. .i made 2 new poems couple of hours ago, one is bl and the other is not

 

 

(i don't know if you could guys see this as a bl poem, but still here it is)

 

 

BARENAKED

 

 

In this midst, I walk

So dark, I'm soak

Yet, I need to move

On this nowhere road

 

Don't know the goal

Why and what for?

Guess, must find a piece

From these scattered debris

 

If i find, I shout

If i didn't, out of sorts

Still carry this vigor

To route for more

 

Then it rains

Body now in stains

Colorless but spur

Inside me roars

 

Cold and freezing

Chilly and shaking

I can't take it

But need to bear it

 

As I look, I see

Those ravish eyes, I fear

Wish I vanish

And rush to my dear

 

Wall starts to break

Dangerous hands, rake

Stripping this cover

Can't stand this anymore

 

"Where are you?

Please help me,

I need you!"

 

I cried and moan

"Please stop it!

I beg you,

It's my dear's own"

 

But within, it reaches

It's too late, I guess

This last breath, must make

BARENAKED feeling, to you, I confess

[K]

. and here's the other not bl one

 

 

EMPTY

 

 

From dust to clay

Molded and lay

From his looks

Oh, it's cooked!

 

Bright stones were embedded

In a circle, oh, it's head

Stick with two holes

Air to passes

 

Dug a hole

Words to install

Red thing so licky

Oh, for tasty

 

But deaf is still

Sounds must steal

Dug another hole

Left and right for more

 

Lighted the coals

Burn to colors

Anyway it goes

It still has roles

 

Red stone embedded

In clay must knitted

Inside this case

Is a life to amaze

 

Then, laid on floor

Opened the door

Magic words, blew

It livens, oh, it's true

 

Delivers to earth

Actions must oath

A world to own

Precious thing to owe

 

Suddenly, it felt

A missing piece left

"What is this?

Tell me, please!"

 

'Cause in this case

Where red stone lays

So cold and steady

Is a feeling of EMPTY

[yaoifangirl]

Your poems are so cool! Especially the BL one! :7yoyo10:

[Yaoi Eater]

Thanks for announcing me Now, let's see...The titles are very well chosen and I truly appreciate that u have rime to the lyrics Nice job, they're both well made.... The BL one seems more deep and full of feeling I really like 'em, post some more :msn_red_fox 3

[Amander123]

I really love them cloudy-chan!!! You're poems are so deep and full of emotion! Yours are so much better than mine lol

 

Mine seem rather silly compared to yours :msn_red_fox 14

[K]

I really love them cloudy-chan!!! You're poems are so deep and full of emotion! Yours are so much better than mine lol

 

Mine seem rather silly compared to yours :msn_red_fox 14

 

. .domo arigato gosaimashita amander-sama

 

. .but i still think, without the inspiration from your works and from the advices of senpai yoji, i guess i will not be able to move myself and made a poem like that, i owe alot to the both of you :leaf3:

[Amander123]

Well thank you cloudy-chan! I'm glad I could help inspire you to write such beautiful poems :3onion15:

[Chacha]

I like very much both your poems! :5yoyo34: But just like Yaoi Eater said, the BL poem is even hotter!