Amander123 Posted April 21, 2011 Posted April 21, 2011 Me and my boyfriend just got into a fight just now and I wrote this poem about 5 minutes ago... :msn_red_fox 18 "Untitled" A stab through my heart And a bullet through my brain You're acting so different And things just aren't the same... Why must you hurt me Whenever you get the chance I think we need to end This torturous love dance... I'm crying every night And tears run down my face I want this hate to end Because I know this is my place... I'm torn between emotions I don't know what to do You walk away in silence Although I still love you... My thoughts are being ravaged By visions of black and red Please come back to me baby Before I end up dead... 8
YLove Posted April 21, 2011 Posted April 21, 2011 Don't be so sad! You'll see things will come back to normal in no time! You should be happy in a way cause it means you love him very much since you are so depressed after a fight... I'm sure you had fights like this in the past too, but you got over them, and I'm sure it will be the same this time too By the way, very beautiful poem 1
JuJu Posted April 21, 2011 Posted April 21, 2011 Oh, it's normal when the couples have some misunderstandings or problems...! Don't worry amander! I'm sure he will soon know how much you love him and how you mean to him! I'm sure! Be positive You are a very good girl. He will soon regret for what he did with you. 1
Amander123 Posted April 21, 2011 Author Posted April 21, 2011 Thank you everyone for your kind words! You all made me feel a lot better:Red_fox7:
Nena21 Posted April 21, 2011 Posted April 21, 2011 Very very beautiful poem! I love it! How are things with your bf? Did it come back to normal? 1
Amander123 Posted April 21, 2011 Author Posted April 21, 2011 Thank you nena! And yeah, just so everyone knows things did get better between us I was mostly to blame. Let's just say that I can get very jealous about things sometimes lol
yojichan Posted April 26, 2011 Posted April 26, 2011 OMG! how are you? I hope you guys are alright now. wow. the poem really expresses your immediate and raw emotions.
JenovaVII Posted April 26, 2011 Posted April 26, 2011 I really like it. Well conveyed emotions and smart words. I am particularly drawn to these two parts: A stab through my heart And a bullet through my brain and My thoughts are being ravaged By visions of black and red Raw and to the point. Lovely. Please, write more (: 1
Amander123 Posted April 26, 2011 Author Posted April 26, 2011 @JenovaVII Thanks a lot I will be sure to post more when I write some
K Posted April 27, 2011 Posted April 27, 2011 . .although it's from your emotions, i still must say, as i expected from your works amander-sama those deep and sad feeling of yours, will fade in time, healing can't be forced, rather wait and everything will be in close 1
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