[Not Broken Yet]

[E.r.o.s]

Not Broken Yet

 

I have gone through hell and back

You have broken every hope

I've taken for granted

Things that I will never have again

I've lost and I've gained

Endless happiness and more

 

But I am not broken yet

There is more to me than this

And I am not broken yet

There is more for you to see than this

 

Don't you think is over yet

Tonight I break away

And show I am stronger than u think

That I've learned from you

That life ain't harder than it have to be

 

Loneliness might seem too painful

But for me is my comfort

Hiding behind these four walls

It's way safer than out there with you

 

And behind a screen and monitor

As I pour my feelings out

I just listen to loud songs

Hoping that someday you'll be proud

 

And someday I will be seeing you

Full of life and happy faces

Full of love that only she can give you

And then I'll finally would be able to face you

Not regrets and no more guilt

As I watch you walk hand in hand

With her memory and my dreams.

[鼠ドル]

I really like it! There's a bit of a problem in my mind with the different rhythms; but to be honest a poem doesn't have to fit a mold or be in a certain shape or form. Still, it's a strong poem and one can tell you've really felt the words that you write, good job!

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Thank you, I didn't thought anybody had commented on it. I've never been too good at writing poems, so I rather write lyrics, but I find either one is a good method to get ur stress out.

[jo_suzaku]

It does help relieve stress.

 

And you are good (=

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Thanks, I also enjoy reading urs.

[jo_suzaku]

Likewise (=